Write a essay beginning as follows:
Furthering my education beyond high school is important because ...
Essay Evaluation Rubric (points in parenthesis):
- first and last name (5)
- expected graduation year from Alden High School (5)
- evidence of research in a career pathway (10)
- evidence of past and current effort to achieve career goals (20)
- sincerity and thoughtfulness (10)
- readability and formatting of the comment (10)
- content is appropriate for an audience of high school students, parents, teachers, and college professors (10)
- 200 - 300 words (10)
- grammar and spelling (10)
- followed directions in this post (10)
Relevant Info
- Each essay (comment) will be evaluated independently based on the criteria in the Evaluation Rubric above by the ACHS business teachers.
- Students may prepare their response in a separate document and paste it into this post as a comment when ready.
- The student who wrote the essay with the highest score will be awarded the scholarship.
- In the case of a tie, the comment received earlier will be declared the winner.
- Comment to this post by midnight on April 30th, 2010. You may ask Mr. Turton or Mrs. Giambra to verify that your comment has been received for moderation, but the comments will not be published.
- Comments will be moderated and published on May 1st, 2010 by the ACHS business teachers.
- A check made payable to the parent or guardian of the winner will be awarded during our end of the year Academic Awards Ceremony.
Jenna Horton
ReplyDelete2010
Furthering my education beyond high school is important because in today’s competitive work world employers seek people who have a higher education and a more substantiated background in their chosen career field.
I have chosen to major in Psychology and minor in linguistics to pursue a career that works with young children. In my Economics class that I took in the first semester of this school year, our class had to do a project that simulated our future career goals. I researched the occupation of a developmental psychologist, and determined that I would need to complete at least 4 years of college, and then at least 2 years of graduate school. I also took college psychology and sociology classes during my junior year which added 6 college credits to my high school transcript.
I know that whatever occupation I choose will involve working a lot with young children. I’ve worked as a counselor at a kid’s camp and I absolutely loved it. I also went on a mission’s trip with my church last February to the Dominican Republic, and will be returning there this coming summer. Our group worked a lot with kids, and it was a really eye opening experience that showed me just how many kids out there need someone to care about them. I want to minor in linguistics because I want to work abroad in third world countries, and it’s a lot easier to help people when you can communicate with them. I would love to do some work in the Peace Corps during college and then get an actual job that involves working in poverty stricken areas such as Haiti. I think that by majoring in psychology and understanding how the human mind works at least to some extent, and having the ability to communicate with those who speak other languages will open a lot of different doors for me in the career world, and will allow me to pursue doing work that I truly enjoy.
My plans for my future aren’t set in stone, and that’s okay. The one thing I do know for sure is that I want to help people, and I know that having an education beyond high school will most definitely help me reach that goal.
Furthering my education beyond high school is important because there is so much that I could give to this world as I continue on this scholarly path of life. My name is Allyssa Kibler and I am ecstatic to graduate from Alden High School in 2010 to continue my goal of going onto college for a major in childhood education.
ReplyDeleteEver since I started babysitting as a younger teen, I fell in love with the aspect of working with children as a career. Children are full of life, innocence, and such potential of being anything they want to be. From then on, I started planning out my college career in teaching. I even obtained a job at a younger age to help start saving money for this.
Throughout high school I have been involved in the Future Teachers of America club after school. I found it to be very beneficial towards my striving goal. This club involves extra time after school to be a teacher’s assistant for one of the younger grade levels in the primary, elementary, or middle school. Personally, I assisted Miss. Occopinti in teaching her first grade class. Although this was very time consuming, it was well worth the life experience.
I feel that these days’ people don’t seem to be focused enough on schooling for children of any age. I can only hope that something gets changed about these budgets so the schools can stop cutting jobs and other involvement. In conclusion, I need to further my education in order to reach my highest potential, and assist another generation to reach their highest potential. In doing so, perhaps the problems we face today can be fixed.
Christopher C. Dorminy
ReplyDeleteGraduating in 2010
Furthering my education beyond high school is important because I want to be able to succeed at my goals and in order to do that I need to go to college and gain as much as I can from those classes. It is my goal to pursue my MBA. While in Business Communications I studied that Accounting is the number one growing field in education today. I also am taking the CEIP course and my mentor is the Controller of the Alden Greatbatch Medical facility.
I have put in countless hours of effort to achieve my goals. I am finishing up Eagle Scout in Boy Scouts of America, which I’ve been in for over 12 years. I’ve worked hard in my Business courses like Business Communications. Something interesting is that ever since I was little I loved business. When I was eight years old I created my own business. I junk picked a table and set it up in my driveway. I bought candy and pop from the Dollar General and resold it to kids around the area. What’s surprising is that I was actually making a profit. I stopped because my mother thought I was taking advantage of the other kids and forced me to shut it down. In Web Design our final project was creating a website for any business. I chose to create my website off of a company that I actually created in Introduction to Business. Once started I put forth as much effort as possible into it. I would finish up in Business Communications early just to work on it. In College Computer Applications I had to create a realistic budget for a fake business. I used the same business again and actually looked up real prices for the products and try to make the best estimates for expenses. Due to the effort I put into my goals, I have been accepted to Canisius College and the University at Buffalo.